Matthew Dorm R3
Ravenclaw
Quidditch Vice Captain
I want to reach out, just show me how?
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Post by Matthew Dorm R3 on Sept 1, 2009 20:35:42 GMT
Poem i wrote. If anyone thinks its good, or knows someone who could give me a good opinion or anything, let me know (: A Display Of Beauty.A glistening star, set encrusted, twinkling in the midnight sky, joined in unison by its companions quiet together in their frozen solitude, but beautiful to all who witness. A glorious array of silent wonder, flashing brilliantly bright on their black canvas, a million diamonds, each with unique beauty, all stand together. And as the sun rises, splashing its wondrous colours, the stars disappear, and the canvas changes, and nothing could match its beauty. And the glorious stars, and the pinnacle array of a sunset, both match each other in beauty, because that is what the world does. Because beauty is something that, lights up those dull moments, quietly twinkles, set encrusted in wonder, and gloriously throws its array of colours, over the glistening fields of content.
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Post by Ivy Tunstall on Sept 1, 2009 20:38:47 GMT
You already know that I like this poem! I think it's very uplifting at the end. Keep writing them! - whenever you feel like it.
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Post by Ariane Chan on Sept 2, 2009 16:09:06 GMT
Aw, that's lovely, Matt. :) Well done!
A few spelling typos - 'witness' in stanza one and 'wondrous' and 'disappear' in stanza three. :)
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Post by zoeyshay on Sept 2, 2009 23:08:17 GMT
It's fantastic Matt, as you already know. :]
You're such a great poet. If only mine were like that, instead of:
The cat ate a bat, The man said no, The man had a hat Which got eaten so, Bad, cat, bad!
LOL.
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Post by Mary Evans on Sept 2, 2009 23:10:43 GMT
Haha Britt! A regular Dr. Seuse! Yours is lovely thought Matt
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Danny McKay G5
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If doing something stupid will make others laugh and smile, then call me an idiot from now on.
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Post by Danny McKay G5 on Sept 7, 2009 15:07:03 GMT
I got bored today (Working a Labor day is stupid.)
So I wrote a poem about something unexpected. ;D
Your words changed in every song. But I knew who you were all along. Even now you sing your song. Damaged and beaten but you keep on. And my respect for you will keep going on too. Maybe in a few months you can take your eternal sleep. but still my Ipod, you I will always keep.
It's old and on it's final leg, it's been freezing so much lately but it just has to hold on till Christmas when I get an Itouch.
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Post by Mary Evans on Sept 7, 2009 16:00:39 GMT
Hehe, I like it. I love my iPod too, 120 gig iPod Classic. I am supposed to be getting an iPhone soon but I will need to keep my iPod too because of the size of it and all it has on it.
But I was wondering, have you heard the song 'You're my iPod' from All Caps?
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Post by Ariane Chan on Sept 7, 2009 16:03:42 GMT
xDD I had no idea it was about your iPod! Nice twist there, TJ!
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Danny McKay G5
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If doing something stupid will make others laugh and smile, then call me an idiot from now on.
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Post by Danny McKay G5 on Sept 7, 2009 16:05:48 GMT
No but now I have to go look up that song ;D, thank you Viv and Mary.
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Matthew Dorm R3
Ravenclaw
Quidditch Vice Captain
I want to reach out, just show me how?
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Post by Matthew Dorm R3 on Sept 24, 2009 14:56:49 GMT
Heh heh, ipod's are awesome, and, now that I'm back, i can actually say thanks to every for saying the poem was good, etc. Thanks everyone
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